作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,高级词汇使用过少;可适当增加从句的使用;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。
My good friend is my neighbour when I was in primary school. He was a tall dark boy. If we have spare time , we always went to the small hill behind my school. One day, I fell down with careless when we climbed down from the hill. I blooded in my leg and I felt very hurt. So he carry me to my home. There was a long distance. That was difficult for a child. I appreciate for this in my life.