文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;文章上下文衔接自然;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用。
I have a good friend, her name is Susan. We have been friends for about 13 years. she sat beside me. we always studied together and played together. Susan is a fat girl at that time. now, she is a fit woman. I have been married 3years ago, but she still be single now. Susan is a hard worker,just like she studied hard when she was at high school. i really miss her.