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there is a beautiful place and kindly people.there is my hometwon which is my childhood time in there.in there between street has a small river.in summer parent will take me and sister swimming in the river.the river is cleanning.my hometwon has much delicious ancient food like fried potato with flour rice and steam river fish and so on.in dragon boat festival each strict has a dragon boat we will have a macth in the big river. how exciting is.dear my friend i hope you will come with me that must be fun.