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Yunnan University The most interesting and historic place in my view is my mother school, Yunnan University. It's located in Kunming, which is called "Spring City" for its ideal climate, not very cold in winter and not very hot in summer. Kinds of plants flourished in virtue of the rich sunlight and rain. The university is surrounded by plants. There are various animals living on tree and being very friendly to person. You can see several groups of people feed foods to sciuridaes. Yunnan University is not only an interesting place to sightings, but also a historic place to read. It's built up in 20s in the nineteen century, which is a revolutionary age in China. Many students coming from this school engaged in the war against Janpan and made use of the knowledge they acquired to strengthen our military forces. So, you can see Yunnan University is a good place to visit.