词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;文中从句过少;文中衔接词丰富。
My best friend is Linda. She has long black hair and big eyes. I like talk with her because she is so clever and humour. Linda always get good grades but my achievement is very poor. In weekday, when I in a jam,I often ask for help to her.What's more,we always play together.