雅思写作范文:出国旅游的利弊

文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词；可将文中部分短句合并为长句，注意文中句子错误；文中词汇表达使用较丰富，部分高级词汇的使用比较灵活，单词拼写方面要继续努力。

In the morden city, more and more people willing to travel on others counties for vacation. so do i,i like trval very much .there, i have some tip or experience. traveling in other country is a best way to relax not only health but also good for people sociaty net spread. it can bring knowledges ,energy and also can spread your horizon to world.people who always travl always have a positive attitute of life ,cause of they are wide of inner world. but also trval can bring load in life, people always spend lot of money during traveling which is unalterable.The cost per time usually need to calculate before departure.To travel will take a big afford to family, it is inevitable.forthemore,if sometime go abroad for travel must remember that Treating everything unfamiliar things in cautions!