上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;作者词汇表达丰富度不足,也请仔细检查文章的单词拼写;使用了个别复杂句,但文中错误句子较多。
I have a good friend who is name Mary .She is looks like beautiful .She has long black hair ,a small mouse with two bright and big of eyes.She has a lot fo hobbits, such as swimming,sing and dance.in addition that,she alway help her mother do some homework.What a wonderfui girls!