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I have a good friend who is name Mary.She is very tall and thin,and she is cute too. She has a head of black hair and a pair of big and bright eyes.She has a lot fo hobbies, such as swimming,singing and dancing.However,she is good at dancing which again second prize in our school.in addition that,she always helps her mother does some homework.What a wonderful girls!