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My new teacher is Chinese teach who is from Shanwei district Guangdong province.She looks so young and actually she is 38 years old now.She has a head of balck hairs with a pair of big and bright eyes.She is very good at teching.She is patience to solve our quetions and always join to us to discussion.Afer claass,she makes a friend with us which we can talk with her.She is not only our teacher but also our friend.