采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用高级词汇。
China is a large country, there are many beautiful places which we can visit. If you ask me , where do I best like to go as the Chinese? It is no dout to me to go to Beijing. Beijing is the centre of the culture and government in China. If we want to learn China as soon as, the first we should visit is Beijing. Beijing is the capital of Chia, there exist many places of interest.The Great Wall built in thousands of years ago, has long history,The Summer Palace is such.Long long ago,The Forbidden City like the White House was where the chief leader lives and works. Therefore,visiting Binjing is the best choise to us to know China Otherwise, China is not only famous for the beautiful palaces,but also the delicious food.Eight Cuisines should be stressed.