作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;简单句偏多了。
MY HOME My home is in Fujian.It is a beautiful town. There are many tree around the little town .And many fish swimming in the river. Although people are poor.there are old house and small street,But the life is so happy. But now,everywhere is high buildings and factory.And the technology cause serious environment problem.Fish and tree disappear. So,i want to say that we must protect the environment quickly.