加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
She was a beautiful girl.She lead me to Wonderland.There were many kinds of flowers who can talk to people.I saw lots of animals flying in the air.I tried flying,but I failed.Alice gave me a suik coat.I put it on,then I could fly as high as them.I was so excited!Suddenly,I failed by accident.