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My favorite sport My favorite sport is football. I love playing football by chance. One day ,when I walked at the road to my home,I get a football. Then,I played it with friends. Finally, I failed in love with football.After that,I often train and raise with classmates. My football star is Beckham who comes from England. I wish I can be a professional football player. I hope my dream will come true.