采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;若加重从句在文中的比例,文章会很棒;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累。
my best friend is lucy ,she is very beautiful ,her hai is curry and have big eyes ,she has a brother .i like her very much ,we are both like aplle ,milk ,banana ,and flower .she likes play baseball and running,i like swimming and football .we are best friends .we have a secret