希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误。
When I was a little girl,there's a new pupil who named Meiju is my best friend .She is a clever and pretty girl,she brought me a lot of happiness .we came to school and gone home together every day.But the happy time is short ,she came back to hometown later ,and we lose the connection from that time . I miss her very much.