文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;全文结构较为严谨。
My mother hired a tutor to teach me history when I was three years old. I think that he might be an enthusiastic man in while I meet with him firstly.He has a square face with no moustaches on it.He is a learned person in Chinese, but I am very tired of his endless historic chatting.such a classic story that every parent wants their kid to be an handsome boy. So studying protocols is the best way to show elegance. But maybe I was not talented in learning history, I showed less interest and finally, my mother had abandoned her dream. Now I am very interested in painting, I will paint many pictures when I am free. My teacher spoke highly of me when she took a look at my works. My mother has realized that I found my talent and she felt happy for me.