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hello,David.My name is lihua. Nice to meet you. I‘m a Middle school student.live in Shanghai. My hopee is Stamp collecting and sports. I am interesting in English and music.I can sing same song. If you are interesting in music too.we can goto KTV . My calssmate wanto seek netfriend,I must help he。Can you help you? My favorite County is UK。I want to goto UK.