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I like swimming,and it's so hot in the summer,so I want to swim in the sea.I think it's funny.And then,I want to tavaling.I want to go to YunNan,that is very glad.I think I should study in summer holiday . Study can make me full of the knowledge. So I will reprew my lesson. I will make my holiday is full of funny.
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