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语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；有效的运用了一些复杂句；文中词汇表达丰富度要提升，可是单词拼写错误稍多。
welcome to china ,and the famous places is relevant to the dilicious food at china so that you can enjoy eating when you travalling. it is the most interestingplace that is the xinghai-park at here which is locted at the oversea and has many interests .most importantly ,there are not a lot creay playing interets but the air is so comfortable when the dark coming. we can walk at the oversea to feel the sence of the sea , also we can playing those intereing things that i have ever played many times when these at our sight. not last but least , it is neaby my home and there is security generally. i am so glad if you come here .
