新东方托福高分作文:对家长和孩子来说游戏都同等重要吗?

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As we all knon,playing games will probably benefit children to build up confidence and cooperation spirits.And for the adult, things go the same? The answer is definitely yes. In the stressful society, people are overwhelming and felt exhausted after work on the daily basis. what's more, playing games can also improve their ability to confront the challenges and difficults which they met in their careers or lives. In the first palce,enjoy a game time which can help children to relieve them from the hard assignment. When I was litter, I often playing tabletennis and soccor and hirdding games after school,which was a really joy and everytime I felt upset I would call on two or three guys to play games to make me refresh to come back to daily study. Obiviously, as a adult,who facing the more stress in social lives,like for a man,who need to make bread for a family and for a women ,who need to balance their lives between their careers and housework,both are really hard to haddle excently. In the modern society,adults should be find a solution to escape themselves from the nervous states for a monent,there are no doubt that palying games is a proporiate way to solve the problem. In the second place, with the society development,there are having higher demanding on a adult for becoming a qualified staff,they only have limited time to enhance their personal ability,no doubtly, playing game could help them to relieve and improve their personal skill at the same time. I was a shame boy and when I entered the high school, I took participate in the sport club and play games third times a weeks.After the experience,i become a social and outgoing person I would be.And for a adult,the communication skill is of significance for the cooperation between two companies. In sum up, palying games is important both to adult and children to become a better person.