希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
My good friend Jane is my good friend. she has black hair, two big eyes, a small mouth and a small nose. we first meeting when I was six years old. we have known each other 20 years. we often do our homework together. after class, we also play games in the garden.I like her.