文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;注意句式在文中的变化,加强一些从句的使用,文章会更棒。
I have a good friend, his name is HuangGuiYuan, He is very young and he came from HuangPu town ZhongShan City GuangDong China.he has a family and a beautiful wife, a beautiful daughter. he lifted here at small, he has two brothers. ther are lifted here too, we are often together something of sometime.however we are looked like brother.