采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;作者词汇表达恰当,同时能较灵活地使用高级词汇。
When it comes to the topic of happiness, everybody’s interpretations vary. But an inspiring idea goes that happiness is not the absence of problems, but the ability to deal with them, which reveals the nature of happiness. Happiness will be achieved only when we show great courage to confront problems and develop the capacity to solve them. And here I may say some words to you. Okay, I don't understand it. How could this one be better than mine? Even when I have said these dumb shit. There is no denying that we will encounter many problems in our life, but that doesn't mean we are deprived of happiness. Many people have set great examples for us to follow: Nelson Mandela was sentenced to 27 years in prison, but he was optimistic and finally became successful in fighting against racial segregation. Steve Jobs was abandoned by his biological parents and dropped out of university but still managed to change the world. In our lives, no one is definitely immune to problems, but we may achieve happiness through striving.