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Nowadays, almost everyone in the cities has a phone. When one is on a subway, he is looking at his phone. When one is on the bathroom, he is looking at his phone. So everyone in the world is more connected because of their phone or Internet. Via the internet, people can use their cell phone and PC to communicate with some else as soon as they want. But every coin has two sides. Since internet has the capacity of making people communicate with others in front of PC or cell phone, which means that people can translate their words without hanging out or face to face talking, more and more people would rather stay at home than go out to meet some one. As a result, some people gradually lose their normal ability to communicate with others. Moreover, many young students bury themselves on the online games. On the online games, they can do things that they cannot in the real world and meet friends just by typing. They get lost on the internet. Young people who are keen on the virtual games even got mental illnesses in the past few years. In a word, the internet also has a negative effect on mutual connection. From my point of view, the internet is the technical crystallize of human beings. It absolutely decrease the distance between people. And it make communication easier and more casual. So internet is necessary in our life. But we should also take attention on the side of its'negative impact. Taking action to clear the unhealthy parts of the internet is important.
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