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Recently , the study shows that most of students don't eat breakfast every day in the Shijiazhuang provence.What happened to them ? First of all , The why they don't eat food in the morning is they must keep full sleep.Second, A lot of homework makes them tireder and tireder.This also cause some serious problem.Such as , sleeping , hungry,So the students aren't concerned about study and make no use of time .What't more ,the parents have busy in their woke all the time .So they only offer their children money to live.However ,some girls who want to keep slim also don't eat breakfast .Finally,we should eat breakfast in time and have more physical training to keep healthy .
