采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者应适量增加从句的使用量;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累高级词汇,拼写错误也要注意。
It is unwise to make a conclusion at once when you have seen or listened a thing. The truth is always complex than we thought, and what we can do is to calm down and keep our mind clearly so that we can do a better decission. In my youth, i did a silly thing and feel emmbrance until today. That was a sunny day,my parents were work, so only i in the home. I felt loney,so i taken my toys went to a garden near my house. At that time, there was a strange man who worn a black suit came in the garden.I stared him
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