衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;文中拼写错误比较多,用词也稍显贫乏;注意下文中出现的错误句子。
l have a good firend .her name's Lili .she is very beautuiful .she is kindly and helpful.she is good at English and chinese.but her Maths just soso .she likes singing and dancing .she always wear red dress.it is very beautiful.but me just soo . l like she very much.Lili is my best firend.