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Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
文中词汇使用较丰富恰当，但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升；语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；可适当增加几条从句。
According to the figures of the survey ,we can draw a conclusion that if you received higher education,you will receive a better job,with a higher salary.In addition,the rate of unemployment is slow down with the higher education level. Why did it happen?In my opinion ,there are several reasons which led to this phenomena. First of all,people who received higher education,his qualities would be better,after they learned from the teacher.Second,they would accept more knowledge,which would include a variety of skills and ideas about science and technology,it means these people could be more skillful and created.On the contrary,the last of they didn't have enough knowledge so that the majority of they had to be a labour,while the rest would be unemployed at home. So,in order to have a better live,rather than to be a homeless,we should go to school,and plug away at our study to match our knowledge,or,in another word ,our life.
