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my friend is a cute girl whose name is yuyan. she has short strangt hair and yellow skin. she loves small. i would like to play with her everyday after school. someday she gone to school late and teacher feel angry to her. she cried and i was really said. i wish our relationship could be as long as i could ever thought.