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My new teacher I'd like to say something about my English teacher in the college, her name is … I forget that ! I'm sorry,my dear teacher! I only remember your last name is "Yan". My teacher "Yan" is a very beautiful lady. And I like her. At the first lesson, when "Yan" ask me to stand up and introduce myself, I have said "I believe I can improve my English score very soon, because I have a so much beautiful teacher".