文章词汇表达比较灵活,高级词汇的使用要继续加强;作者应在平时练习中加强复杂句的练习;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Dear David. I am Li Hua. I am studying in a middle school. I am living in Sanghai, which is a very beautiful city.On the one hand I like collecting stamps and doing some sports. For example, I play basketball, soccer and ping pong when I am free. I am caught in English when I was 1o years old.On the other hand I sing some pop English songs during my spare time. My classmates want to make friends on the Internet. They hope to get help. I want to go to England when I graduate from the university. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best wishes Yours, Li Hua