单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;简单句比重过高,另应加强复杂句的练习;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Dear David I am glad that you will go to Lanzhou in order to learn Chinese. Chinese is difficult for you. But I believe that you can learn it well, because you are very smart. Do not worry, I will tell you how to learn Chinese easily. It is not difficult for you. First, you should read Chinese book every day. Second, you should read Chinese dictionary every morning. Third, you should read the book again before you sleep. If you do that, you will learn Chinese well. I hope you can learn well.Best wishes to you. Your friend Chen Chuang