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语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用；请作者加强词汇表达的灵活性，但文中有较多拼写错误。
With the development of internet, more and more people prefer to online shopping than outside shoping. Why is online shipping is more porpulor. There are three reasons. First of all, online shopping is a new life style, it can help people save a lot of time, everything you need is a computer or a telephone and a interent. Secondly, online shopping is very convinence. you can buy everything if you wanted to buy. thirdly, when you paid the money on the online, you can do not things but waitting time, because a few days later the deliver will give you the goods which you buied on the online. while, no matter how convinence to online shopping , there are still a litter probrems. such as, right now, online shopping is not safe enough. when you online shopping, you should provide you address and you account. as far as i am concend, everything has two side, online shopping is good enough, but the account safe is also imporant.
