可将文中的简单句转换为长句或者复杂句;文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
I have a good friend,and his name is Tobby. He is a very nice guy and he is very intresting too. We often play basketball at school and many other games so that we have a lot of fun together. Also Tobby is a cute and good-looking boy. He has blown hair and and two big beautiful eyes. At the same time,Tobby is a warm-hearted boy because he loves to help people. I am glad that I have such a good friend.