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Hi Mike, welcome to visit my hometown china .what is the most interesting place i will tell you at the end . There are many mountains our hometown .when you walk on the ground ,you will fell better than the city.more than ,the air is fresh and nice.if you want to eat something ,we can offer you some local snacks. My hometown is a beautiful place .there are many frasrating views .for example, the guanyinhu is the most beautiful place in our town . you can travel round the lakes,more than you can play game on the boats.This is my hometown,i hope you can come here quickly. finally ,if you have free time recently, i'm very glad to see you.welcome to visit my hometown