文中用词稍显贫乏;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累。
I have a good friend. She is a beautiful girl. She has long black hair, two black big eyes and a red mouth. Her voice is good. she is good at singing. She is a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. She is also nice. she often helps us . Our classmates love her very much.