托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第52篇:草率的判断是否可信

文中词汇表达灵活多样请继续保持，高级词汇积累也做的很棒；从句使用量不足，应增加从句和复合句的使用；行文稍欠流畅，应适当增加连接词的使用。

in addition, overpopulation also harms our earth. the more people compete for the limited resources in the earth, the more unfavorable the earth is for a living. for example, in Beijing, the vast majority of people compete for the limited job positions and therefore they have no alternative but to work long hours for little pay. the demand for accommodation is so huge that citizens have to pay exorbitant rents for tiny house that even a country hen distains to live in. in addition, too many people live in this big city, the food, water, electricity and correspondingly scarce. every year, for short of hospitals, medicine, and foods, a fair proportion of people die unnecessarily and wastefully. obviously, we have to devote ourselves to an endless struggle with the earth for survival and definitely such a grim struggle will harm our common garden, the earth.