请注意积累词汇量,还要注意单词拼写;简单句偏多了;建议在衔接词汇方面加强积累。
I have a friend. she name isLiLi. she is a beautiful girl.she has black long hair.she has two black big eyes and a red mouth. she is smart girl. she like rending book,playing computer game and chess.she is good at math.she think it is intersting.she often help us. she is my best friend.