2015年高考作文优秀范文：我的家乡

句式多变，多多练习从句的使用；恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒；词汇表达较灵活准确，高级词汇使用过少，另外注意文中个别的拼写错误。

When i was 12,a causal time i saw the LeBrom James in the Sport TV,you konw,he is the super basketball player in the NBA.I remember that day,i almost absolutely fascinated by him,he is very strong and basketball skill is so proficient.From then on,i bacome a fan of him.Although my body condition is pool in playing basketabll, however, everytime i will playing in my mind.