2015年高考作文优秀范文：我的家乡

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When i was 12,a causal time i saw the LeBrom James in the Sport TV,you konw,he is the super basketball player in the NBA and now he played for the Cleveland Cavaliers .I remember that day,i almost absolutely fascinated by him,he is very strong and basketball skill is much more proficient so that he has a nickname-'king'.From then on,i bacome a super-fans of him.And last summer,James lead the team won a championship and he was the mvp.Although my body condition is pool in playing basketabll, however, everytime i will playing in my mind. Besides James, i like Westbrook,he is played for the "Thunder"and he is a guard.well,you know, this position need much more flexible and a wide prospective,in other words,in part he is the master n the game.