2015年高考作文优秀范文：我的家乡

采用了恰当的衔接手法，层次清晰；从句使用量不足，应增加从句和复合句的使用；作者词汇基础不错，在高级词汇的积累上还要再接再厉。

In my middle school,maybe I am 12,a causal time I saw the LeBrom James in the Sport TV,you know,he is the super basketball player in the NBA and now he played for the Cleveland Cavaliers.I remember that moment when he shot,I almost absolutely fascinated by him,since he is very strong and basketball skill is much more proficient so that he has a nickname-'king'.From then on,I become his super fan.And last summer,James led the team won a championship and he was the mvp.My body condition is pool,for instance,my height is not enough, however, I will play in my mind. Besides James, I like Westbrook,and now he is played for the "Thunder" .He is a eminent guard.Well,you know, this position need much more flexible and a widely prospective,in other words,in part he is the master in the game.