2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

从句数量偏少，应增加文中从句和复合句的使用；文章词汇表达丰富，若多用高级词汇多检查几遍单词拼写就更好了；文章上下文衔接不是很紧凑，结构缺少组织。

my views on online shopping today,online shopping is popular in the life.more and more people buy cloths ,food,or equitment by the computer and phone.it is take less time to buy thing.The people ,who can buy everything stay at home .it's convenient of busy people to save time,such as businessmen,boss,or white collar workers. Athrought online shopping have many benifits,there are also some problems.for instant,the buyer can't received goods in time.so i advice buyer to selest careful,online shopping can't safely.