从句数量偏少;文中有几处拼写错误,应增加高级词汇的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
We watch things through our eyes and listen to the sound by our ears every day and every second.However what we see and hear is not usually the truth.The world is full of the lies.If you can recognise the truth, you are a surperman. As we all known, there is no body who is right all the time.For exmple ,some people who have color blind consider red is green. So how can you believe what you watch is realistic.What's more ,The voice can misunderstand you.When you hear the story form others , how could you tell whether waht others talk aboult is realistic?So when when we are going to get a conclusion, we should think it more than one time.What the things?How did it happen?When did it happen?Is it reasonable?If you think about them and have the answer ,you could get the right answer. In conclusion,consider the things that you hear and see.don't be cheated by the surface.
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