语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者句法知识掌握的不够好,可适当增加从句的使用;作者词汇基础不错,在高级词汇的积累上还要再接再厉。
On earth there is nothing great but man; in the man there is nothing great but mind; in the mind there is nothing great than love. As the cartoon indicates that love is like the power of lamp, the shadows more dark, the shining more brightly. Love is man’s supreme virtue, concluding not only personally emotion, but also the power you give to the social. When we meet troubles in daily life, pain and sorrow,twists and turns also come without inviting. Then if someone comes as a lamp to warm us, even the words may be pale, the pieces of emotion are righteous. Then, hope is right there.What’s more, the power you release to the social which warms more people who are in adversity seems to be the sun the sun in spring. For instance, caring about the children in orphanage and visiting elders in bead house, your coming may bring peace and love to their heart, beauty to their world, and contentment and joy to their days. The supreme happiness of life is the conviction that we are loved, so they are. I set forth that as if we are always ready to give a helping hand to those who are in trouble whether they are familiar to us or not. In this way, can we make a sweeter and more