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Although to break bad habits is harder than develop them,we should try our best to cast aside these bad habits. there are several common bad habits in our daily school life,such as play computer game without control,play mobilphone every second and stay up all night.What can we get from them?Just a short moment of pleasure,in fact,and indulging in them which is a lose of fighting spirit for life. Before breaking these bda habits,we should make it clear that what we really want,and who we want to be.These are power that can drive us to make a change.It is not a easy course ti break bad habits,so we should always encourage ourself to do something more meaningful ,such as partiicipate in science and technology lecture,do some sports and so on. When getting rid of bad habits,can we live a efficient and health life.