托福独立写作模拟题:关于金钱

文中词汇使用较丰富恰当，但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升；语句间的衔接成分用得不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；作者句法基础较为扎实。

Many people believe that it is important to make large amounts of money, while many people satisfied to earn a comfortable living, in my opinion I more flavor the one which are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. It is okay for a person making large number of money if his motivation is kind. He can use his money to help the people who are disability to live, also he can contribution his money to improve the condition of education. But when people make money just for themselves to get extravagant, it will get themselves greedy and twisty. On the other hand, if people are satisfied to earn a comfortable living, I think they at least not the pressure of the social, and they can live by themselves and don't need to ake people for help. And most important thing is that they didn't waste the source of social. Eventually, I think money is a tool for people buy goods they want, so I prefer to make money just make me comfortable, that is all I want.