文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;文中衔接词丰富。
football is my favorite game. I remember the first time I played it with friend was when I picked the football by a chance on the way to home. Since then I started to love this game. I joined the school football team and got regular training for every week. We always held competition while the break between the classes. Bake Ham is my idol because he was a successful football player and that inspires me to aiming to be a professional football player.