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My grandfather is 76 year old,he very old. He like Autumn,bucaue he like yellow leaf. And he like take a walk with grandmather. He hus a lot of wrinkle and white hair. He hus same brown clothes and green shose, he vary like wear that. He is very like me,and I also often help grandfather,for example:I usually at night help grandfather wash the dishes. I like my grandfather!