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A busy day Today is sunday.It is a holiday.I think I can help for my mather to do housework. At 8 o'clock I get up early, and then have brackfast.after brackfast I finish my homework. I ask my mather:'what can I help you ?' mather tell me that I can wash the clothes by myself. It's a good idea! I take the soup with clothes.There are more bubble.I like it. After lunch,I play pingpong with my classmate.We are very happy. At night,I watch TV show. It's a busy day.