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Dear Sigmund, My name is Liu Hong. I’m a Grade 9 student in No 2 Middle School. I like blue and yellow . My parens are stringent . I have few playtime every day . I very like cosplay . I always spent so much time for cosplay in after school . sometimes I can't finish my homework and my study becomes more and more badly . I got very distrssed because My parents and teachers want to me abandon my interest . I hope to hear from you soon. Best wishes! Yours, Liu Hong